I'm interested in magic, so I'd read at least a chapter or two to see if it does not focus too much on military for my taste (military scifi, military fantasy so far have bored and/or irritated me when I tried them; it's just not my cup of tea).

Details that tripped me up were the first sentence using "at summons" instead of "at the summons", and the fact that Eli and Jamshid are never mentioned to start or be walking, but suddenly arrived somewhere. After you included details of the inside of the tent, it seems odd there is no description of the camp or whatever other area that they walk through at all.